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 Jiraiya Younger Days

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Fayt Susomi
Ninja Academy Student
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Fayt Susomi


Male Number of posts : 4
Age : 33
Location : Mist Village, WPB, FLA.
Registration date : 2010-08-27

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PostSubject: Jiraiya Younger Days   Jiraiya Younger Days EmptySun Aug 29, 2010 1:33 am

This is my first time making my own card...

Jiraiya Younger Days Jiraiy13

Jiraiya Younger Days Jiraiy13

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Lovely Ino
Special Jonin
Special Jonin
Lovely Ino


Female Number of posts : 134
Location : Cloud Village
Group : Ino-Shika-Cho
Registration date : 2010-03-08

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PostSubject: Re: Jiraiya Younger Days   Jiraiya Younger Days EmptySun Aug 29, 2010 2:27 am

Wow, you did an amazing job with that... whirlwind effect. It looks really natural on the card and the character image. I love it.

There are a couple of capitalization errors on his effect, but mostly, it's worded correctly, which is great for your first card!

With respect to his effect itself, it's neat to see some classic lightning recycling with a toad twist, but it's... pretty broken, I think. At the very least, I think his first effect should "deploy" a toad.

In all, it's a great start! Thank you very much for sharing, and I would love to see you keep going with card making.
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Fayt Susomi
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Fayt Susomi


Male Number of posts : 4
Age : 33
Location : Mist Village, WPB, FLA.
Registration date : 2010-08-27

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PostSubject: Re: Jiraiya Younger Days   Jiraiya Younger Days EmptySun Aug 29, 2010 2:34 am

Lovely Ino wrote:
Wow, you did an amazing job with that... whirlwind effect. It looks really natural on the card and the character image. I love it.

There are a couple of capitalization errors on his effect, but mostly, it's worded correctly, which is great for your first card!

With respect to his effect itself, it's neat to see some classic lightning recycling with a toad twist, but it's... pretty broken, I think. At the very least, I think his first effect should "deploy" a toad.

In all, it's a great start! Thank you very much for sharing, and I would love to see you keep going with card making.

I felt the same way with his effect at 1st however instead of the deployment, I went for an entrance of 3 or lower, because your late game in ninja lightning is good to hit, also he only brings back toads, so it's not like you can bring back any ninja. This being said I wanted you to be able to hit your curve the way a toad deck should, and being that you can only bring back E C 3 and lower, if you already hit your curve correctly you can't even bring anything out any way. The second effect was to help his 1st and give the deck a boost towards lightnings direction being search/ deck thin. and finally with the up coming sage mode, I didn't want to ruin your chances at playing that, so I gave him the growth effect, so you really only have 2 turn with this effect until you most likley switch and set your late game up right.
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Age : 30
Location : The Mist Village,NY
Group : Proctor, Ino-Shika-Cho
Registration date : 2008-11-01

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PostSubject: Re: Jiraiya Younger Days   Jiraiya Younger Days EmptySun Aug 29, 2010 2:38 am

Wow, really nice job to get the outline on your first card is a feat of excellence you will go places. Id be happy to help you if you had any questions of concerns about making naruto cards. Also make sure you check some of the Sticky threads in this part of the forum it helps with common Capitalization and grammar errors made by card makers. Any way keep up the good work and like I said im always here so just ask!
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nirvana
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Registration date : 2010-08-31

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PostSubject: Re: Jiraiya Younger Days   Jiraiya Younger Days EmptyTue Aug 31, 2010 7:47 am

Fayt Susomi wrote:
This is my first time making my own card...

Jiraiya Younger Days Jiraiy13

Jiraiya Younger Days Jiraiy13.
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uhm rather nice
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Fayt Susomi
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Age : 33
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Registration date : 2010-08-27

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PostSubject: Re: Jiraiya Younger Days   Jiraiya Younger Days EmptyWed Sep 01, 2010 3:20 am

nirvana wrote:

uhm rather nice

Thank you very much
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